A young girl sits at her laptop typing up "Poetry contests"
Her small heart beating as tears run down her face
She finds a website that seems different from the rest
A world where she can finally speak her mind
This 12 year old girl writes stories of mourning
filled with the pain the world has brought her
An innocent child telling her life story to strangers
All around the world writers help her giving her actual advice
This girl finds hope in a small poetry website and her writing helps heal her wounds
She uses this site to get out her emotions while learning of ways to get help
She grows up loving these strangers and sharing poems of her life
These people become friends and some like mothers listening to her day
She learns to care to help and to heal
Her poems slowly change
This girl who was sad now seems glad and she writes out all she's feeling
Writing for years this girl has changed for now she is 17
This girl is me and this site is you, all you beautiful poets
You changed my life and helped heal my strife now I'm going to live past my teens
Jan 08, 2024
Neopoet Around the World
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
Title: Neopoet Around the World
Review:
The poem "Neopoet Around the World" tells a heartfelt story of a young girl finding solace and support through a poetry website. The narrative arc is clear, starting with the girl's initial discovery of the website and ending with her personal growth and gratitude towards the community.
One strength of the poem is its emotional resonance. The portrayal of the girl's pain and her subsequent healing through writing is poignant and relatable. The use of vivid imagery, such as tears running down her face and her poems changing over time, effectively conveys the depth of her emotions and transformation.
However, there are a few areas where the poem could be further developed and refined. Firstly, consider exploring more specific details to enhance the reader's understanding of the girl's experiences. For example, what were some of the specific challenges she faced, and how did the community on the website provide support? Adding concrete examples can make the poem more engaging and allow readers to
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Hello Vivi
Or Olivia (you don't say which you prefer). Some interesting work you have produced. All I will say is keep writing and read as much variety as you can. There are always useful pieces of advice out there. Not so much from AI. Best of luck. Alex.
We are...
so glad that you found us! Your testimonial has touched my heart. I remember when you came here, looking for a place to show your personality, wanting to write, and hoping that you would get some encouragement. The Neo-family has been here for you, and it shows that you are still here with us. Thank you for letting me know that you are worth the worry that might have come from a young girl on the site. I am always glad to see your offerings and hope that you will always be as glad as you are now, in the future, that you stuck around. ~ Geezer.
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Dear Vivi,
It is so very good to read that you have spent a few of your formative years with us. Growing and changing with you. I hope that I have been part of that process. We all want to be helpful and also learn from you, as you have so much to say! Have a great day!
*Hugs, Cat
Dear Vivi...
you should enter this poem, Neopoet Around The World, in the proper category, it belongs in the Neopoet Around the World Anthology, not the Neopoet weekly. ~ Geez.