If I

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Thank you for sharing your poem. I appreciate the brevity and simplicity of your piece. However, I would like to offer some feedback to help you further develop your ideas.

Firstly, the repetition of "Close my eye" and "I see you" creates a sense of focus and intensity. It suggests a strong connection or longing for someone. However, the poem lacks context and detail, leaving the reader with unanswered questions. Who is the subject of the poem? What is the nature of the relationship? Providing more specific imagery or descriptions could help to enhance the emotional impact of the poem.

Additionally, the line breaks and spacing in your poem seem to be deliberate choices. While they create a visual effect, they don't contribute significantly to the overall meaning or flow of the poem. Consider experimenting with different line breaks or punctuation to create a more cohesive structure and rhythm.

Lastly, the final line, "Take me with you," introduces a new element without much explanation. It feels somewhat disconnected from

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Is simple yet powerful. I can hear and feel the grief. The last stanza stands out to me as you broke the sentences down into simple form and I can hear the inner monologue struggling to find peace with your grief. If this is true for you, my deepest condolences. Well done.

Unlike AI, I think you have said just the right amount. It is good to leave the reader wondering!

*always, Cat/Canddlewitch

I definately feel this way also, Thanks you are a noble soul. Keep writing!