GHOST LIGHT

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem effectively uses vivid imagery to convey a melancholic atmosphere. The use of phrases such as "gun metal sky," "cotton shadowy somber clouds," and "bony arms stretched out" contribute to a strong sense of gloom and desolation.

However, the poem could benefit from more consistent punctuation. The lack of punctuation in some lines can make the poem difficult to read and disrupt the flow. For instance, the line "Depression surrounds. Rain" might be more effective if it were punctuated as "Depression surrounds; rain," or split into two separate lines.

The metaphor of the "bony arms" of the trees "stretched out like idolization" is intriguing, but could be clarified. The current phrasing suggests that the trees are idolizing something, but it is not clear what that might be. The "spherical Ghost light" could be the object of their idolization, but if so, this could be made more explicit.

Lastly, the poem's structure could be more consistent. The first three stanzas each contain four lines, but the final stanza contains six. While there is no strict rule that all stanzas in a poem must have the same number of lines, a more consistent structure could enhance the poem's rhythm and readability.

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Delving into what depression looks and feels like. I like how you used metaphors to represent this. Your structure is getting better each write and I know as always you are working on this. The last stanza is my favorite as the dark feel to the poem seems to peak and the visual of the Daisy's with their bony arms is vivid. The words Ghost light seems to represent the foggy feeling a depressive episode can place us in. Good job. Can't wait to see revisions.