A Promise for me
A New Year Resolution
Chance for brand new start
A proposed plan for true change
Promising me a new life
Dec 27, 2023
A New Year Resolution( Tanka)
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
A Promise for me
A New Year Resolution
Chance for brand new start
A proposed plan for true change
Promising me a new life
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
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Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "A New Year Resolution" is succinct and straightforward, offering a clear message about the hope and promise that a new year can bring. However, there are a few areas where the poem could be improved for greater impact and depth.
Firstly, the poem could benefit from the use of more vivid and specific imagery. The phrases "Chance for brand new start" and "A proposed plan for true change" are quite abstract and could be made more concrete and evocative. For instance, the poet could describe what this "brand new start" looks like or feels like, or what specific changes the "proposed plan" might entail.
Secondly, the poem's rhythm and meter could be refined. As it stands, the lines of the poem do not have a consistent syllable count or rhythmic pattern, which can make the poem feel somewhat disjointed. Establishing a more consistent rhythm could help to make the poem more engaging and memorable.
Finally, the poem could benefit from a more distinctive voice or perspective. As it stands, the poem's speaker seems somewhat generic, and it's not clear what makes their experience of the new year unique or interesting. Adding more personal details or reflections could help to make the poem more engaging and relatable.
In conclusion, while the poem's theme of hope and renewal is a compelling one, the poem could be improved by incorporating more vivid imagery, refining its rhythm and meter, and developing a more distinctive voice or perspective.
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Poem was trying to use Tanka
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Poem was trying to use Tanka
Poem was trying to use Tanka firm 5,7,5,7,7
Tanka...
I'm not sure that the AI reads the type of poem, before making proposed changes.
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I find that theA1 Neopoet
I find that theA1 Neopoet review always has the same general criticism, need more imagery, syllable count inconsistent. It does not respond well to poems other than free verse. It doesn’t take into consideration the real feelings if the poet regardless what imagery isnpres3nted.
I find that theA1 Neopoet
I find that theA1 Neopoet review always has the same general criticism, need more imagery, syllable count inconsistent. It does not respond well to poems other than free verse. It doesn’t take into consideration the real feelings if the poet regardless what imagery isnpres3nted.
I find that theA1 Neopoet
I find that theA1 Neopoet review always has the same general criticism, need more imagery, syllable count inconsistent. It does not respond well to poems other than free verse. It doesn’t take into consideration the real feelings of the poet regardless what imagery is presented by the poet!