3 a.m. actually, it's 3:39
I'm awake and I wonder why?
I'm searching for a reason
so tired, I want to cry
A special number, is it?
I think it may portend
a time, a date, whatever
I have questions without end
I wonder if I've missed
something putting this to rest
I feel I am forgetting
although I've done my best
Why should these numbers
mean so much to me?
Are they magical, these digits
Like nine, is made by threes.
My Boy's Club numeration
from many years ago
where I had a lot of fun
a place I loved, you know
Nah, it couldn't be just that
I try again, to get some sleep
but the numbers in my head
still are there, they creep
I haven't figured out
why I wake at a such an hour
but I still wake up this time
those numbers have a power
Someday, it will come to me
I will have to keep on trying
I'll just have to go on waking
at the hour, of three and thirty nine
Comments
Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Three and Thirty Nine" presents an intriguing exploration of the significance of numbers, particularly the time 3:39, in the speaker's life. The use of rhyme and rhythm contributes to the overall flow of the poem and helps to maintain reader engagement.
However, there are areas where the poem could benefit from further refinement. For instance, the poem could benefit from more concrete imagery to help the reader visualize the speaker's experiences. The line "I'm searching for a reason" could be made more vivid by describing what this search looks like or feels like to the speaker.
The poem also seems to lack a clear resolution. The speaker's repeated questioning of why they wake at 3:39 a.m. builds up anticipation, but this anticipation is not fully resolved by the end of the poem. The speaker concludes by stating they will continue to wake at this time, but it's not clear why this is significant or what it means to the speaker. Providing more insight into this could help to create a more satisfying conclusion.
Lastly, the poem's structure could be more consistent. Most of the stanzas contain four lines, but there are a few that contain six. Maintaining a consistent stanza length could help to create a more balanced and cohesive structure.
Overall, the poem has a strong concept and engaging rhythm, but could benefit from more concrete imagery, a clearer resolution, and a more consistent structure.
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3am and after...
I find myself awake at the time frequently. Often recapping the day, the month, even the whole year. It's like our minds don't know enough to let us rest or maybe there is a lesson we haven't learned yet. Well done
Thanks...
These numbers are specific, and I wake to them on my cable box or phone all the time. Weird huh?
Thanks for the read and comment. ~ Geez.
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Dear Geezer,
I believe you are right in these numbers being prophetic to you!Let your feelings lead you this time! I love the poem and these are my favorite lines:
Why should this little number
mean so much to me ?
Are they magical, these digits
like nine, is made by threes
do you need a question mark after (threes?)
*love, Cat
You are...
right, I can do without the question mark after threes. Thank you for the read and critique. I missed that. ~ Geez.
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Great flow and rhyme. I agree
Great flow and rhyme. I agree with you on the first stanza and think you may need to choose a word that has more syllables or depth to stress the effects of being awake every night at this time? Concious, conciousness, stirring, aware? Ruby :) xx