Stay.
No one waits for you
Out in that cold night
Where blindness reigns.
Stay.
Tomorrow we can wake together
On a bed of elation,
Recounting this white night's
Magic
Dec 08, 2023
Stay
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Just throwing this out there for the sake of it. Any feedback is appreciated.
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
hello,
Respite from the cold night and loneliness. Taking refuge where you find it, with someone who smooths your rough edges. That is my take on your poem. Very nice!
*Happy Holidays, Cat
Thank you, Cat..
...I was just remembering some nights when I was young, how a snowstorm brought a certain comfort of being stranded with someone I wanted to get closer to. All the best to you and yours!
Thomas
Short and sweet
I can hear my own thoughts echoed in your words....all I want is for someone to stay...well done.
Sometimes..
..unexpected weather activity can be a blessing. Cheers RoseBlack and holiday greetings!
Thomas
Well ok I'll stay but,,,,,
Well ok I'll stay but,,,,,
Pull my vest down when you're done,Thomas.
I like these "shorts", usually written off the cuff so to speak, they either work or don't,
I particularly like the latter half of this, though, enjoyed the whole.
Obi.
Hehehehe...
..only if I'm blackout drunk.. It's funny how a simple idea can write itself out in moments. Not much in the way of snow yet in my neighbourhood, but maybe I'll look for you next storm.
Cheers Obi!
Thomas
Stay
Hello, Thomas,
Pure romance...
L
That is..
..a sweet, simple reply that says it all. All the best to you and yours this holiday season. Thank you, Lavender.
Thomas