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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Thank you for sharing your poem. I appreciate the emotional depth and introspection in your words. Here are a few suggestions to consider:

1. Imagery: To enhance the impact of your poem, consider incorporating vivid and specific imagery. This will help to create a stronger connection with the reader. For example, instead of "Look at me, I'm broken," you could describe the brokenness in a more tangible way, such as "Look at me, shattered like a porcelain doll."

2. Metaphorical Language: While you mention hiding behind a metaphysical wall, the metaphor could be further developed. Expand on the concept of the wall and its significance to your emotions or experiences. This will add depth and complexity to your poem.

3. Consistency: Pay attention to the consistency of your tone and imagery throughout the poem. For instance, the first stanza focuses on feelings of brokenness and regret, while the second stanza shifts to empty dramas and longing for someone to stay. Consider how these

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aspect of this piece would undoubtably be impacted with the absence of rhyme. Any changes in the length of the lines would be magnified and the whole thing would descend into chaos. As it is, the uneven length of the lines, do make for stutters and a certain uneasy tone. The use of the word [mystical] rather than [metaphysical] could reduce the bump of the last line of the first stanza. In such a short piece of work, the use of multiple syllable words should be carefully matched with the meter.
Is there a reason for the word [regret] being capitalized? ~ Geezer.
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Were intense and resonated deeply with me. You can hear the heartbreak and regret in every line. I think adding to the poem would deepen it as well as give your audience more to go on while reading this. Nice job.