Geezer
Geezer
Nov 07, 2023
This poem is part of the challenge:

November 2023 Challenge Write an Acrostic Poem Using HAPPY

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Happy, Happy, Happy...

How many ways can I say I love you?
About a billion, zillion
Perhaps you will understand how much
Perhaps you won't, unless I say it again
Yes, I love you, I love you, I love you...

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Poe

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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Happy, Happy, Happy..." seems to focus on the theme of expressing love, with the repetition of the phrase "I love you" serving as a central motif. However, the title of the poem does not seem to directly correlate with the content. It might be beneficial to consider a title that more accurately reflects the poem's theme.

The poem could benefit from the use of more vivid and varied language. The repetition of "I love you" is effective in conveying the speaker's feelings, but it may be more engaging if these feelings were expressed in a more nuanced or metaphorical way. This could add depth to the poem and make it more impactful for the reader.

The line "Perhaps you won't, unless I say it again" introduces a sense of uncertainty and the need for reassurance, which could be further explored in the poem. This could add an additional layer of complexity to the poem and make the speaker's emotions more relatable to the reader.

The poem could also benefit from a more structured rhythm or rhyme scheme. This could help to create a more cohesive and rhythmic reading experience.

Lastly, the poem might benefit from a more definitive conclusion. As it stands, the poem seems to end quite abruptly. A more conclusive ending could provide a sense of closure for the reader.

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RoseBlack

Of Nights In White Satin...my favorite love song. How he keeps saying yes I love you, yes I love you, oh how I love you... absolutely melts my dark little heart every time. This was a really fun little poem. I enjoyed it

Geezer

now that you mention it... Now, I can't get that out of my head! LoL I wonder if maybe it wasn't in my subconscious at the time.
Anyways, thanks a bunch.~ Geez.
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RoseBlack

Not a bad song to listen to over n over...I've always had this dream of dancing to that song...maybe some day.

Geezer

It's just a little something that occurred to me after trying for a couple of days... Believe it or not, I sometimes work at these things for a while. I thought that the words and lines should sound like the mood. Light and saucy. Thank you for your read and comment. ~ Geez.
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Lavender

I found it to be clever and charming, with a perfect title. When I read it, it made me smile! You're pretty sharp with the acrostic and minimalism styles.
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Geezer

I'm glad to bring a smile to the lady's lips. I love words and the art of using them to express my emotions. ~ Geez.
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