Monster Under My Bed

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem's exploration of inner turmoil and emotional distress is a compelling subject matter, and the metaphor of a monster is a powerful tool to convey this. However, the poem could benefit from greater consistency in its metaphors and imagery.

For instance, the monster is initially described as being inside the head, but then it is mentioned as crawling out from under the bed. This could potentially confuse readers as to the monster's actual location and metaphorical significance. It would be beneficial to clarify this point for a more coherent narrative.

The use of the phrase "spoiled on love's broken promises" is an interesting way to express the cause of the speaker's distress. However, the poem could delve deeper into this aspect, perhaps by elaborating on these broken promises or their effects on the speaker, to provide more emotional depth and context.

The final stanza introduces a new symbol, the black rose. While this is a striking image, its connection to the rest of the poem is not immediately clear. It would be helpful to further develop this image and its relationship to the monster or the speaker's emotional state.

The rhythm and rhyme scheme of the poem could also be more consistent to enhance the flow and readability. For example, the second stanza does not follow the AABB rhyme scheme used in the first and last stanzas.

Overall, the poem has a strong emotional core and uses vivid imagery, but could benefit from more clarity and consistency in its metaphors, development of its themes, and adherence to a consistent rhythm and rhyme scheme.

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I enjoyed this, there are a lot of lines that made me think about the turmoil created and how in the dark hours we are all subject to our own thoughts. I liked the way you linked themonster in your head to the monster under the bed. Well done, great poem. Ruby :)

I, too like your poem and enjoyed your variation on presentation. it reasserted your charming personal sense of style. the content is very effective. good work!

*love, Cat

p.s.
best of luck to you!

*eddy styx

Great poem Rose. The real monsters are in our head. Your poem is hard to beat!

chilling, to say the least. To know that nothing that lives beneath your bed, could beat the demons in your head. I see that it resonates with no few poets here. Nice job. ~ Geez

Hi, Carrie,
Enjoyed all of this, but that final stanza, especially "black rose on the bed" was profound. Clever take on the contest theme - and so true.
L