Moving on?

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Moving on?" presents a narrative of struggle and potential redemption. The use of imagery, such as "stand in the sun" and "dark days had fallen", helps to create a vivid emotional landscape. However, the poem could benefit from a more consistent rhythm and rhyme scheme to enhance its musicality and flow.

The poem's theme of overcoming adversity is clear, but the narrative could be more effectively developed. The transition from "dark days had fallen" to "the moment had come" feels abrupt. Providing more context or detail about this turning point could make the narrative more compelling.

The phrase "Sufficient unto the day was the evil thereof" is somewhat difficult to interpret. If this line is intended to be a key turning point in the poem, it may be beneficial to rephrase it in a way that is more accessible to the reader.

The question at the end of the poem, "would I rise from my knees and walk into the sun?", effectively leaves the reader with a sense of anticipation. However, the poem could benefit from a stronger build-up to this question to make it more impactful.

Finally, the poem could benefit from more varied sentence structure. Most of the lines in the poem are similar in length and structure, which can make the poem feel monotonous. Varying sentence structure can help to keep the reader engaged and emphasize key points in the poem.

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Hello, AN,
Very intriguing language. I get the feeling of being stuck in a non-satisfactory place in life, needing to move on, but not knowing how to be brave enough to do it. I do have a suggestion that may help the reader to understand the poem's message more clearly - at least for me. I noticed you used some caps and some punctuation. Perhaps use both throughout the entire poem? It would separate the thoughts a bit better.
Thank you, and I'll return!
L

Great poem, I like your poems. Deep thoughts,