Daydreaming

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Thank you for sharing your poem titled "Daydreaming." I appreciate the opportunity to provide feedback.

The poem captures a moment of daydreaming and longing, focusing on the anticipation of when the heart will give out. The imagery of licking dry lips adds a sensory element to the poem, enhancing the reader's connection to the speaker's experience.

However, I would suggest considering ways to further develop and expand upon the theme and emotions in the poem. While the concept of daydreaming and the anticipation of something significant happening is intriguing, the poem could benefit from additional details or imagery to create a more vivid and engaging experience for the reader.

Consider exploring the reasons behind the daydreaming and the emotions associated with it. What is it that the speaker is yearning for? Is there a specific event or person that they are longing for? By delving deeper into these aspects, you can add layers of complexity and emotional depth to the poem.

Additionally, you may want to experiment with the structure

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Intense, but yet, soft. There is something to the rawness of the poem that is dignified. A remarkable private thought.
L

We. daydream of similar things. I am sad for the both of us or angry
I don't know which.

Thanks for your comment. I totally agree!

What you have written here, sounds like a good beginning of a poem! Please add more? I would love to see it!

*hugs, Cat