Why do we die?

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Thank you for sharing your poem. I can see that you are exploring the theme of emotional pain and exhaustion. Here are a few suggestions to consider:

1. Imagery: Consider incorporating more vivid and specific imagery to help the reader visualize the emotions you are experiencing. This can make your poem more engaging and impactful. For example, instead of saying "I just feel hurt," you could describe the pain in a way that creates a strong visual image.

2. Structure: Experiment with the structure of your poem to enhance its overall impact. You might consider using line breaks or punctuation strategically to create pauses or emphasize certain words or phrases. This can help to convey the emotions more effectively.

3. Expansion: While your poem captures a sense of weariness and pain, it would benefit from further development. Consider exploring the reasons behind these emotions or delving deeper into the experiences that have led to this state. This will add more depth and complexity to your poem.

Remember, these suggestions are meant to help you

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that the AI, having no emotions about death, can't possibly understand about death and the even more traumatic effect of knowing that you are, not right away maybe, but quicker than you would like, going to be dead. I felt the half healed but still raw wounds. Anyhow, the weariness comes through, the effort of carrying the burden weighs heavy in your arms. Whether it is about you or someone else, I felt the lines, the emotion. You might have been able to utilize the things that I see the AI has said, but I felt the impact more from the words and the connections of all the different emotions. ~ Geezer.
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