Destiny!

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Destiny!" presents a thoughtful exploration of themes such as fate, memory, and spiritual reckoning. The use of imagery, such as "Fragments of my future past scattered across the ether" and "the cold dark mistral winds", effectively conveys a sense of the ethereal and the transient. However, the poem could benefit from a more consistent use of punctuation and capitalization to enhance readability and rhythm.

The line "my heart of hearts is given in remembrance of their essence" could be clarified. The pronoun "their" is ambiguous in this context. Is it referring to the "fragments of my future past"? If so, it might be beneficial to make this connection more explicit.

The phrase "my own life’s fire a flickering" is intriguing, but it might benefit from further development. What does the flickering represent? Is it uncertainty, instability, or something else? Expanding on this metaphor could add depth to the poem.

The last four lines introduce a religious element with the mention of "the King". If this is a key theme, it could be introduced earlier in the poem to create a more cohesive narrative.

The use of enjambment, particularly in the lines "my own life’s fire a flickering / ,but ]in my soul I feel", seems to disrupt the flow of the poem. The punctuation here is also confusing. Consider revising this section for clarity and fluidity.

Overall, the poem has a strong emotional resonance and explores its themes with a sense of introspection and profundity. However, refining the poem's structure, punctuation, and clarity could enhance its impact.

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about the punctuation and capitalization.
a double [i] in misty.

~ Geezer.
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