he sat on a gold coloured shitter
not "X"ing on "Formerly Twitter"
and perplexed, we expect
that a "tweet" is an "X"
sadly vexed with the hex of a quitter!
(next turn...)
his face never graced "TwitterX"
'til his pride became rifled with wrecks
now the platform's O.K.
for his legal dismay
as he brays for your credit or cheques!
Last Few Words: ...just thinking stupid stuff waiting for my wife... wrote a limerick. All in fun, of course! Update...dang, I need to stop watching the news...
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
This
This was funny. I need a little silliness today. Well done!
Thank you
RoseBlack. I'm glad to have brought some silliness to lighten your day!
Thomas
Oh,, God bless ya, Thomas !!
Oh,, God bless ya, Thomas !!
Brilliant !!!!!!!
Obi.
Hey Obi...
..glad this tickled your fancy...funny the stuff people can think up when we're bored. All that subconscious clatter rises like a turd sometimes! Sorta like politicians and their ilk.lol
Cheers!
Thomas
Loved it, very funny, and
Loved it, very funny, and about as childish as X. Ruby :)
Hi Ruby..
...I was hoping it would come to good use. You just confirmed that. Thank you!
Thomas
Rhymes With Orange
Hello, Thomas!
Just when I finally figured out what "Twitter" and "Tweet" meant!
I agree with Obi...brilliant!
L
Hi Lavender
..and thanks for reading and commenting. The limerick is my favourite form because of its simple and unique rules that dictates conservation and of course, fun!
Thomas
Hello, Thomas,
Your added limerick seals the title. So good. I need to stop watching the news, too.
L
Hi Lavender
..and thanks again. I don't really like being fixated to news in general, but I always seem to expect to find something that restores just a little bit of confidence in the decency in humanity...seems it's usually something you need to look for in other situations. Maybe that's one reason I come here.
Thomas