Neopoem Of The Week August 20th To August 25th 2023

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I HAVE A DREAM

I have a dream, tall, lofty in grandeur,
To be a beacon of hope, oozing magic, catching the stars,
Crumbling the walls of wither, wishing away its evil cause
I have a dream, a dare to leap.

I have a dream,a touch of miracle,
Bathing in the warmth of Joseph's grace,
To be a blessing to many, a curse to no foe,
A story that tingles many lips, a journey to admire, embark.
I have a dream, a way to go.

I have a dream, a mindset awaken,
To be the darkest night to all hate, sour wounds
To sun the gloomy moons buried in the leaves of gnashing teeth,
To grow to glow, to grow to glow,
To be a perfect design, perfect sketch of excellence.
I have a dream, a lifeline.

I have a dream, do you have one?
To show the stars I can shine brighter,
A dark horse galloping into zenith, a chief key stone,
To be welcomed into the smiling stares of posterity,
Loved by folks who swam better in my sea of second chance,
While I watch from the clouds that clothe me
I have a dream, I wish you have more.

About This Poem

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Is the internal logic consistent?
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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Nigeria , NGA

Favorite Poets: Niyi osunadare

Comments

Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "I HAVE A DREAM" conveys a strong sense of ambition and hope. The repetition of the phrase "I have a dream" throughout the poem creates a powerful and determined tone. The imagery of catching stars, crumbling walls, and bathing in grace adds depth and vividness to the poem.

One suggestion to enhance the poem is to consider varying the structure and rhythm. Currently, the poem follows a consistent pattern of two lines per stanza. Experimenting with different line lengths and stanza structures could add more dynamic energy to the poem.

Additionally, some of the metaphors and images could be further developed to create a stronger impact. For example, the line "To be the darkest night to all hate, sour wounds" could be expanded upon to provide a clearer and more evocative description.

Overall, "I HAVE A DREAM" is a poem filled with aspiration and a desire for personal growth. With some refinement in structure and further exploration of imagery, the poem has the potential to

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And what a dream it is

There is so much hope and determination in this poem. Good descriptive language and flow. Well done!