Lavender
Lavender
Aug 21, 2023

Here's To You

When I am older
next twenty years,
and you are older, too,

we'll sit beneath
the slate blue sky,
and share a drink or two.

We'll toast to friends
who've sailed away
over the great divide,

and think about
the times ahead
just beyond the other side.

So sing sweet songs
to our living boons
who roam with us each day.

Sing sweeter songs
to unforgotten souls
who are never far away.

When I am gone
some thirty years,
and you shall follow soon,

we'll sit within
the bright vast sky,
raise our glasses to the moon.

Cheers to all
who crossed our paths
with whom we shared a smile.

Here's to all
who saw us through,
those who made it all worthwhile.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Salud! L

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: I tend to read Ted Kooser

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Comments

Ruby Lord

Lovely, I enjoyed the rhyme scheme and the simplicty of your poem and the way it built and came together at the end. Ruby :) xx

Geezer

tribute to life and one's living contribution to it.
Yes, we are all together in this world, let's live in it like we all belong.
I like the three line format, it makes for a sharp picture,
rather than long lines blending the whole thing into one big blur.
Nicely done! ~ Geez.
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S

Unusual rhyme scheme which does a good job of avoiding a sing song effect. I also enjoyed the theme of how we can none of us avoid getting older. But I still fight against it lol

Lavender

Sitting beneath a sunny sky, sharing a drink or two seems to make getting older a little less disagreeable.
Thank you!
L

RoseBlack

picture engraved in my mind. I can envision sitting with an old friend, a family member or significant other and reminiscing about life. Your poetry always seems to enfold your reader in what feels like a gentle hug. Always a pleasure to read!

FinleyOrion

Hi Lavender! Can I just say that your work is absolutely lovely. And this particular poem is just…magical. Really. I don’t know how else to describe it except for that it was bittersweet nostalgia with an undertone of hope. Thank you for sharing! :)