We Can't both be Kings

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Analysis:

The poem "We Can't both be Kings" explores a sense of guilt and burden carried by the speaker. The imagery of the walls and the weight of the crown adds depth to the emotional tone of the poem. However, there are a few areas where the poem could be strengthened.

1. Ambiguity: The poem leaves some elements open to interpretation, which can be effective in creating depth and engaging the reader. However, in this case, the ambiguity may hinder the clarity of the message. It would be helpful to provide more context or specific details to help the reader understand the situation and the "mess" that has been made.

2. Show, don't tell: The poem relies heavily on telling the reader about the emotions and sensations rather than showing them through vivid imagery or sensory details. Consider incorporating more sensory language to bring the reader closer to the experience and make it more immersive.

3. Consistency of tone: The poem begins with a sense of secrecy and unease,

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imagine that the union of two lovers such as kings, might not be exactly an item of propriety in certain places, which is why oit gives the air of secrecy and unease. I would have preferred that it be just a little less ambiguous, however, a nicely offered tidbit. ~ Geezer.
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Hello, Leo,
I know your poetry usually has many meanings within its content. It feels like this one does, too. I sense the guilt, but also feel the line "I think we have done no wrong" is extremely strong and sincere. It makes me wonder what is causing the guilt - is it an outer element, or inner turmoil... Intriguing title and deep language. I'll wait for your response.
Thank you!
L