Focusing upon the soul through spiritual meditation,
We realise the core meanings of our innermost mind,
Sculpting our true natures through the will of self creation
To discover our pure connection to the unique and divine.
As we voyage to the deep through our mental introspection,
The energies of emotional realities so begin to emerge,
And actual truth of our meanings manifests in our reflection,
As the internalisation of subconscious essences converge.
With the sediments of self finally settling into stratification,
Our alignments of our true inner form begins to manifest,
And with an emergent feeling of profound blissful elation,
We displace then overcome the discordant fears of distress.
Then finally travelling unto the crystal cave of mystic wonder,
Unifying through the Pineal nexus of our astral unique soul,
The true reality of the mind we at last have finally uncovered,
Our unique individuality and perfect place within the whole.
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The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Sublime Refined Divine" presents a deep exploration of the self through spiritual meditation and introspection. The use of rich, evocative language and metaphors effectively conveys the journey of self-discovery and the realization of one's place in the universe.
However, the poem could benefit from a more varied rhythm and structure. The current form, while consistent, can feel monotonous and may detract from the depth of the subject matter. Experimenting with different line lengths, stanza structures, or rhythmic patterns could enhance the poem's overall impact.
The poem also leans heavily on abstract concepts, such as "the energies of emotional realities" and "the internalisation of subconscious essences". While these phrases are intriguing, they could be clarified or grounded with more concrete imagery or examples. This would make the poem more accessible to readers and increase its emotional resonance.
Lastly, the poem's language is quite formal and complex. While this can add a sense of gravity and seriousness to the subject matter, it may also make the poem less approachable for some readers. Simplifying the language or incorporating more everyday vocabulary could make the poem more relatable without sacrificing its depth.
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Sounds like
A journey through astral projection...the things were discover when we are surfing the astral plane...I have had several experiences there during a reiki session. Great description in this piece. I love the spiritual elements to your writing. Well done.
thankyou, i no longer do
thankyou, i no longer do healing sessions but loved them when i did, i study psychology and counselling at university instead...
thankyou kindly...
a.p.
I love psychology
Studied it and was dirty credits shy of a degree when I had to stop but continued to study on my own. I especially like studying behaviors and what makes people tick.
I studied philosophy at
I studied philosophy at cardiff until i had a breakdown in my very early twenties...
wrote a notebook of poetry during the process, one mad night on a whim posted it through a temple letterbox
all got plagerised...
i had no backups
'we found love'
'no place i'ld rather be'
'centuries'
'deep six'
all mine...
il never see a penny or get credited for any of it...
i hope they fucking hurt at night!
Some people
Are just soulless and take others for a ride. I'm sorry that happened. Karma will get them in the end.
ive sent you a message so we can continue our chat
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