July 2023 New Member Contest

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WHERE'S THE RULE BOOK?

I love the English language; Well I usually do,
The chance to express my thoughts in poem,
But it always helps if I remember a rule, or maybe two.

With sixteen punctuation marks which help to pave the way,
And with about a million words which I can use,
I can usually share the things I'd like to say.

Yes there are those sentences which I must construct,
They'll be complex, compound independent or some such,
The countless words I can add, or maybe I'll deduct.

I always must remember; I before E, except after C,
The homophones must be straight and no other way,
I must remember the subject and verb, may never disagree.

There are periods, question marks, and ellipses too,
Apostrophes, parenthesis, braces and brackets,
Perhaps I'll need a dash or a colon just might do.

I'll use nouns, pronouns, prepositions and such,
And with verbs, adverbs, and adjectives at hand,
A well placed interjection might just add that touch.

As I pull my keyboard closer mixing meter, rhyme and verse,
With Ibuprofen and grammar check to help as yet they may,
I'll try to remember all the rules, for better or for worse.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Sometimes it's fun just to have fun!

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

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Comments

Neopoet AI (premium) - 5-29-23 version

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem demonstrates a solid understanding of the English language's complexities and nuances, using a playful tone to explore the rules of grammar and punctuation. The structure is consistent, which aids in the poem's flow and readability.

However, there are areas where the poem could be improved. For instance, the line "They'll be complex, compound independent or some such," could benefit from clearer phrasing. The term "some such" is somewhat vague and could be replaced with more specific language to enhance the reader's understanding.

In the line "The homophones must be straight and no other way," the use of the term "straight" could be confusing. It might be more effective to use a term that more directly conveys the concept of correctness or precision.

The poem's rhythm could also be more consistent. For example, the line "With Ibuprofen and grammar check to help as yet they may," disrupts the rhythm established in previous stanzas. Adjusting this line to fit the established meter could enhance the poem's overall flow.

Lastly, the poem could benefit from more vivid imagery. While it effectively communicates the challenges of writing in English, incorporating more descriptive language could make the poem more engaging and memorable for the reader.

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