This thing we share
Has brought me to insanity
If this here is love
I think we invented a mental disorder
At times I fall for the fairy tales we used to tell
Now I think about the hours I wasted on dreaming
And it makes me want to break all my mirrors
See, everybody knew I loved you with my heart and soul
If you couldn’t see that then I can recommend an optometrist
What’s the point in saying I love you
Sheesh, all it gave me was hope and no action
I’m living on ten thousand tanks of hope
How about some soul searching
I looked through mine and it was missing you
We played cupid’s game like two birds in one nest
I think his dart broke before it hit your heart
Sorry are my words to vivid for you
Well. Then you want to trade for my nightmares
Yes, this kind of poetry puts me in a new light
I guess it’s better than living in utter darkness
Here’s a thought free of charge
If you want out of this physcotic affair
Walk out the door and don’t you look back
Don’t worry about me
Just learn how to count your regrets
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The End Of Our Story
These lines really moved my heart
What’s the point in saying I love you
Sheesh, all it gave me was hope and no action
I’m living on ten thousand tanks of hope
How about some soul searching
I looked through mine and it was missing you
thx
im glad your ok your in my prayers
Thanks Paul
Thanks Paul
There is a mess but what came out on TV not true.
http://new.neopoet.com/node/2561
much love and respect
WOW
I love it. It's.... honest. It's not embellished with fancy shmancy words, it's just honestly what you think, and I love that. Top to bottom, love it.
honesty
is what the soul dabbles in
A totally diffferent voice from anything I've heard
in any of your previous work.
Dabbles?
A poet's soul either floats or drowns in honesty.
Which one is this? (that was rhetorical, I know the answer).
I'm really appreciating the increased use of colloquialism, it brings it home. I feel it.
The line-
I’m living on ten thousand tanks of hope
feels weird. 10,000 tanks of hope petrol for the journey?
Sorry are my words to vivid for you
[Sorry are my words too vivid for you?]
That last line is either bloody brave or arrogant!
Just learn how to count your regrets
Fuckin ace, mate, as we say over here.