Change

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Thank you for sharing your poem "Change". Your poem is a powerful expression of taking control of one's life and not letting others dictate how you feel or behave. The use of metaphors such as "Rain on my parade" and "one hundred percent Sun" effectively convey the idea of a shift in attitude and perspective.

The repetition of "manipulate" and "manipulator" creates a strong sense of the power dynamic between the speaker and the person they are addressing. However, I would suggest exploring different word choices to avoid repetition and add more depth to the poem.

Additionally, the poem could benefit from more sensory details to create a vivid image in the reader's mind. For example, what does the speaker see, hear, smell, or feel as they make this change in their life?

Overall, "Change" is a thought-provoking and empowering poem. Keep writing and exploring different techniques to enhance your poetry.

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is to change the word [manipulating] in the sixth line, to [controlling] rather than have the word twice in one line. The rest of the piece is good, with a bare minimum of words, like a short note to be found in the aftermath of your leaving. ~ Geez.
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