A simple thought,
That sets off fears.
Spreading panic,
To create our tears.
A simple moment,
That sets our ways,
Casting time,
To ruin our days.
A simple word,
That sets off a lie.
Spreading hatred,
To make us cry.
But a simple smile,
And a single laugh.
Creates much joy,
And not by half.
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The Simple Things
You have stated the way it really works - one single, simple thought, moment and/or word can turn everything sour. And it seems they have a ripple effect that affects everyone around. But then along comes a smile and a joyful laugh, and it can all change for the better. I enjoyed this very much!
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