Geezer's Last Word... [Write your epitaph 6/23].

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem titled "Geezer's Last Word..." presents a humorous and light-hearted take on the concept of an epitaph. The poem's structure consists of two quatrains, each with an AABB rhyme scheme. This simple structure allows for a clear and concise message.

In the first quatrain, the speaker acknowledges the universal nature of life and death, which is a common theme in epitaphs. The lines "I was here, I lived and died" and "Some will feel, good he's gone" suggest that the speaker is aware of the mixed emotions people may have about their passing.

The second quatrain introduces the idea of cremation as the speaker's preferred method of laying to rest. The use of humor in "No place for you to piss upon / but you can kiss my ash!" adds a playful twist to the poem, making it memorable and engaging.

To improve the poem, consider the following suggestions:

1. In the first line, "It's all the same with everyone," consider rephrasing it to create a stronger opening statement that captures the reader's attention. For example: "A common fate we all must share."

2. In the second quatrain, the phrase "underneath the grass" could be replaced with a more vivid image to create a stronger contrast with the idea of cremation. For example: "Not buried deep in cold, damp earth."

3. The poem's rhythm could be made more consistent by adjusting the syllable count in each line. For instance, the second line could be shortened to "I lived, I died, now here I lie."

Overall, the poem effectively uses humor and a simple structure to convey the speaker's thoughts on their own passing and preferred method of burial. By refining the imagery and rhythm, the poem can become even more engaging and memorable.

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your religious background which is "Hinduism". The last respect or rites giving to a dead person- (antim sanskar).

My dad was alive and predicted where he would be buried. Truly, we fulfilled that. Same with my mum.
A very powerful piece!
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Beautifully done! I love it.

...captures an irascible spirit, love it man, love it!

Very good, made me laugh. Ruby :)

Wonderful! Says it all!
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Ahhhhhh, Geez.

Best one yet.

Obi.

Those ashes sure taste dry lol

Best Epitaph ever! I would expect nothing less than that last line! Well done!

I absolutely love this one, it's not overly sappy & it's got a punchline, graveyards might not be so sad if all headstones had them. unfortunately, they aren't appropriate for everyone's situation.

Bravo!!

p.s. if they tried to piss on your grave I'd knock their back teeth out, Smile.

love and higgliest bugs Sis xxx