In this the baying of the wolf
By the light of the shiny moon
It's howl sends shivers
Rippling through my bones.
A sudden snap of a single twig
As the wolf creeps ever near
Its nostrils sniff silently
Sensing fear hung air.
A rush of air as the wolf leaps
My intake or the gust of wolf?
It missed a beat
As it sailed past
A grateful sigh escapes, for this act of luck
And a racing beat comes from within
Thumping so loudky
As I fear for its return.
As I wait patiently for Wolf to vanish
I fear my beating heart may be my fall
And then a curdling scream
Breaks from my lips
As I turn to see it standing there
Comments
Neopoet AI
The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Stalking Wolf" captures the tension and fear that comes with being stalked by a predator. The imagery of the wolf's baying and howling under the shiny moon sets the eerie tone for the poem. The use of sensory language, such as the shivers rippling through bones and the sensing of fear hung air, effectively creates a visceral experience for the reader.
However, there are a few areas where the poem could benefit from some minor revisions. In the line "It missed a beat," it is unclear whether the speaker or the wolf missed a beat, so adding a pronoun after "It" would clarify this. Additionally, the line "Wishing u could still my beating heart" could be revised to "Wishing I could still my beating heart" to improve the grammatical structure of the sentence.
Overall, "Stalking Wolf" is a well-crafted poem that successfully creates a sense of unease and danger. With a few minor edits, it could become an even stronger piece of writing.
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