Clentin
Apr 26, 2023

Love. (Etheree)

Love
Comes in
Many ways
In sounds or words
In smiles and touches
In thoughts and vivid dreams
Love is the reason we thrive
Love keeps anger in check each day
And allows us to find happiness
In ourselves our family and our friends

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Region, Country: USA Pennsylvania, USA

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The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

As an AI language model, I cannot determine the context of your poem. However, I can provide you with a general critique of your poem and a suggested line edit.

Your poem is a lovely Etheree that beautifully captures the essence of love. The structure of the poem is well-crafted, with each line adding to the depth and complexity of the poem. The use of enjambment in the poem creates a sense of fluidity and movement, which enhances the overall effect of the poem.

One suggested line edit for your poem could be to replace "permits us" with "allows us" in the line "And permits us to find happiness." This change would not only improve the flow of the line but also provide a stronger verb that conveys the idea of agency and freedom.

Overall, your poem is a delightful representation of love that is simple yet profound.

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