Warm summer morning, the air was dry
and so the grass in the field
Seven cats stalking, shadows walking
To see what the field would yield
Old Tom, lingering slow behind
Sees what the others have missed
what they didn't find, so kind
The world felt warm, sunkissed...
Now, full of snacks of bugs and mice
a sunny spot, so very nice
They gathered for a rest with bests
and napped away 'most the day
Dreams of sundrenched patios
behind the glass from winter storms
flitting through their memories
in the comfort of someone's arms
The chill of twilight settles in
purple daylight will not last
They climb the hill, with some light still
before end of shadows cast
Facial rubs given to the clan
I am yours and you are mine
Family members special handshake
Bestowed to only to our kind
The silence of the street, is heavy
as the moon nestles in a tree
Old Tom dreams of warm arms and petting
of "When she still loved me"
Cat Descriptions...
Old Tom -
Grey Tiger with a mustache and goatee of white
Black -
Black, going slightly grey, with a white star on his chest and slight limp in rear-leg
that has pure white foot.
Yellow Tiger -
Unkempt, slightly bedraggled, yellow and white tiger, a bit pudgy.
Lanky -
Dirty white, slender like a new born colt, loose limbed
Gopher -
Gopher-brown with thick spiky fur, black feet, always nose to the ground.
Tuxedo -
Typical black cat with very even, white markings on chest, front paws and chin
Tippy Toes -
[who would rather be called Princess] white, immaculate fur, who escapes regularly
from home to hang out.
Comments
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The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Cats in the Sun" captures the peaceful, lazy demeanor of felines basking in the warm glow of summer. The imagery of the cats stalking through the dry grass is vivid, and the descriptions of each cat's appearance add a personal touch to the poem. The line "Dreams of sundrenched patios" is particularly lovely, evoking a sense of nostalgia and comfort.
However, there are a few areas where the poem could benefit from editing. In the line "what they didn't find, so kind," the phrase "so kind" seems out of place and doesn't add much to the overall meaning of the line. Instead, consider replacing it with a more descriptive word or phrase. Additionally, the poem could benefit from a more consistent rhyme scheme, as some lines rhyme while others do not.
Overall, "Cats in the Sun" is a charming poem that captures the essence of lazy summer days spent with beloved pets. With a bit of editing to improve the flow and consistency, it could be even stronger.
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I love this
Such a charming little poem about your neighborhood cats. I love how they have their own personalities and enjoy spending time together doing whatever it is that cats do. Well done.
Thank you...
It's nice to see them around the neighborhood. I hardly see them at all during the winter. I can't wait to see them sunning themselves in the morning on the warm sidewalk. ~ Geez.
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Pride of Pussy Cats
I really liked the way the pace of the poem seems to fit the pace of cats. As one who has had a cat or cats for the most of my life, one of the things you learn is that they take life at their own pace, unhurried by external stimuli unless it impinges on their instincts for safety or hunting. I could see the seven of them wandering through the grass and catching the warmth of the sun.
Thank you...
I couldn't help but notice, the omission of the common term "cat owner." To say that one 'has' a cat or cats; [in my opinion] is
somewhat a misnomer, just a little away from being a cat owner. I say you can 'have' cats, like you can have ants, if you don't have anything they want... fortunately, they love the good life, and for most of them, 'having' an 'owner', means not having to forage for a living and able to laze about. I wish that we could 'have' a cat, but my wife is allergic. Anyway, I still have my pride
of neighborhood cats and I guess that will suffice. ~ Geez.
. P.S. Anyone ever tell you, you resemble John Lithgow?
Definitely Not An Owner
We differ a bit on the definition of "having cats". For me, it means that we co-habitate. I get to feed, water, and change their litter, and, in return, if they feel like it, they might let me pat them or hold them in my lap. They are room mates more than anything else.
I totally agree...
I must not have made myself clear on the definition of having cats. I feel the same way about them. My wife only became allergic a few years ago, and before that, we did 'have' cats. like you, we fed and watered them and they were outside cats, so no litter. They in turn, played with us when they were bored, and sat close or on our laps when they wanted some warmth and/or comfort. Yes, more like college roommates, than anything. ~ Geez.
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Gee.. could pen anything
Sublime artistry, captivating lines! Nice job here.
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