Clentin
Apr 22, 2023

Words

To pray
More than saying
Allows us not to stray
Stopping ourselves from complaining
Each day

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Region, Country: USA Pennsylvania, USA

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The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Words" is a brief contemplation on the power of prayer and how it can help us stay on track and avoid negativity. The use of short lines and simple language gives the poem a straightforward and accessible feel, which suits its message well. The poem's rhyming scheme, with the end words of each line matching in pairs, adds a touch of musicality that enhances the reading experience.

One possible line edit that could improve the poem is to revise the second line to read "More than just saying." This change adds a bit of emphasis to the idea that prayer involves more than just reciting words; it's a deeper, more intentional act.

Overall, "Words" is a thoughtful and uplifting poem that encourages readers to reflect on the role of prayer in their lives. While it's not particularly complex or innovative, it's a well-crafted piece that effectively conveys its message.

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Lavender

Hello, Clentin,
Serene and peaceful. Simple and reflective. I wonder, is this intended to be a Cinquain? If so, your original actually fit the syllable count, 2,4,6,8,2. Not certain AI recognizes certain structured poetry just yet.
Lovely!
L