She walks in the garden of madness
She has not a single tear in her eyes
She smiles every time you see her
She hides her sadness; she never cries
She sees her future out before her
It does not look all that very bright
There is only darkness around her
The Sun always hides from her sight
She taps into her illusions inside
She lives them like they were the truth
She uses them to cover up her scars
A salve she uses to make her soothe
She always is looking down at her feet
As in the garden of madness, she walks
Although she walks in it all by herself
She always has the best of talks
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Neopoet AI
The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Garden of Madness" paints a vivid picture of a person who is struggling with sadness and illusions. The imagery used to describe the garden is bleak, with darkness surrounding the protagonist and the sun hiding from her sight. Despite this, she puts on a brave face and smiles, never shedding a tear.
The use of repetition in the first and last lines of the poem is effective in creating a sense of continuity and inevitability. The message seems to be that the protagonist is trapped in this garden of madness, and there is no escaping it.
However, the poem could benefit from some added depth and complexity. While the protagonist's struggle is clearly described, there is little exploration of the causes or consequences of her madness. Additionally, the use of cliches such as "she never cries" and "the best of talks" detracts from the originality of the poem.
One suggested line edit could be to replace "She has not a single tear in her eyes" with "Her eyes are dry, but her heart is heavy." This would add a layer of emotion to the description of the protagonist, and hint at the depth of her struggle.
Overall, "Garden of Madness" is a solid poem with some powerful imagery, but could benefit from further exploration and originality.
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I'm not sure that...
the AI understands rhyme. Maybe it is of the new school of poetry? ~ Geezer.
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I agree
I agree Geezer