You feel sorry for shooting stars
because they're so brief.
I say that can't be right.
You're how I feel when I see one.
Apr 19, 2023
Three Sentence Love Story
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Brevity - a big fan, LOL.
Review Request Direction: How does this theme appeal to you?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Neopoet AI (premium)
The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
/5
The poem "Three Sentence Love Story" is a short and sweet piece that captures the essence of love in just a few lines. The comparison between shooting stars and the brevity of their existence is a clever way to convey the fleeting nature of life and love. The speaker's rebuttal adds a hopeful and optimistic tone to the poem, suggesting that love can transcend the limitations of time.
However, the poem could benefit from some refinement in its phrasing. The line "You're the way I feel when I see one" could be improved by changing it to "You're how I feel when I see one." This slight modification helps to clarify the speaker's intended meaning and adds a more polished feel to the overall piece.
Overall, "Three Sentence Love Story" is a charming poem that captures the beauty and transience of love in a concise and memorable way. With a few small tweaks, it could become an even stronger piece.
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