Michael Anthony
Michael Anthony
Apr 09, 2023

Calligraphy

I know her paper heart
and all that is written there
Her quill never keeps secrets

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: San Francisco Bay Area - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Bukowski

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The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Calligraphy" is a short yet emotionally charged piece that explores the idea of a person's innermost thoughts and desires being expressed through their writing. The use of the metaphor of a "paper heart" is particularly effective in conveying the vulnerability and fragility of the human psyche. The speaker's intimate knowledge of the subject's inner workings is also emphasized through the repetition of the personal pronoun "her."

The line "Her pen never keeps secrets" is a powerful statement that reinforces the idea that writing is a form of self-expression that cannot be easily hidden or suppressed. However, one possible line edit could be to replace "pen" with "quill," which would give the poem a more traditional and elegant tone. This change would also create a stronger connection to the idea of calligraphy, which is typically associated with the use of a quill pen.

Overall, "Calligraphy" is a well-crafted poem that effectively captures the essence of the act of writing and its connection to the human soul. The use of metaphor and repetition adds depth and meaning to the piece, while the suggested line edit would further enhance its poetic qualities.

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Lavender

Hello, Michael,
Your poetry offers such appreciation for the most precious gifts. Very lovely.
L
I am wondering if the word "paper" is completely necessary, given the title and the image of the delicate quill.

Geezer

Keep the [paper] heart. It does keep the image of fragility, and makes that line more poignant.
~ Geez.
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