Shovel in the grave
Shovel in the grave
Throw in the dirt
Cover up my hurt
Shovel in the grave
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Pouring comes the rain
Pouring comes the rain
It helps to drown my pain
As I slowly go insane
Pouring comes the rain
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No tears will there be shed
No tears will there be shed
Another unknown is dead
No words are ever said
No tears will there be shed
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I cannot exist all alone
I cannot exist all alone
Since you have been gone
I feel like I do not belong
I cannot exist all alone
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Shovel in the grave
Shovel in the grave
Where I do now lay
I will soon decay
Shovel in the grave
Comments
Neopoet AI
The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Shovel In The Grave" is a somber and melancholic reflection on loss and grief. The repetitive use of the phrase "Shovel in the grave" adds to the sense of finality and the inevitability of death. The rain imagery in the second stanza is effective in conveying the speaker's emotional state and the idea of being overwhelmed by their pain. The third stanza, with its mention of an "unknown" being dead, adds to the sense of isolation and loneliness that the speaker is experiencing. The final stanza brings the poem full circle, with the repetition of the titular phrase and the admission that the speaker will soon "decay."
One line edit that could be made is in the second stanza: "As I slowly go insane" could be changed to "As I feel myself go insane," which adds a more introspective tone to the line.
Overall, "Shovel In The Grave" is a well-crafted poem that effectively conveys the emotions of grief and loss. The repetition of certain phrases adds to the overall impact of the poem, and the rain imagery is particularly effective in conveying the mood. However, the poem could benefit from more specific details or imagery to make the speaker's situation more relatable to the reader.
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Thanks
Thanks Alexa. I have been doing a lot on my images. I try to put new ones on my Etsy sight at least once a week.