In the Evening!

The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "In the Evening!" evokes a sense of whimsy and romance in its description of a fall evening. The use of warm and colorful melodies creates a sensory experience for the reader, and the imagery of stars falling through young lovers' eyes is particularly striking. The poem also effectively captures the fleeting nature of the evening, with the moon appearing as people begin to leave and the final line describing the silent departure of those who were present.

One possible line edit could be to change "as though they'd never been" to "as though they were but a dream." This would further emphasize the transience of the evening and add to the overall dreamlike quality of the poem.

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A sleepy little hamlet with the same sonorous streets,
unchanged in generations; young lovers walking in the lamplight
swishing through the autumn leaves. The moon comes full and
people start sliding off into the twilight, going home.
Distracted, the writer never sees them leave, they have just gone.

Nice scenario, makes me feel like I'm there in the cool, brisk air
of fall. I don't see anything to correct. I even agree with the line
that the AI dropped on ya as a replacement. ~ Geezer.
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Yes me too. Or the old sections of the worlds cities where the streets are cobblestone and little wider than alleys. I can feel the stones under my feet with moon above. Running my fingers along 200 year old red brick wall and mortar.

John if you wanna do a song this would be a good start
Tim

I have to keep the words in the studio and look at them a bit. The more I repeat them the closer I get. Occasionally it’s instant but that’s pretty rare.

I’ll give it a shot.
Tim