Michael Anthony
Michael Anthony
Mar 31, 2023

Second Cup

She stands in the doorway
twisting, turning, and stretching,
intent on informing me of her decisions.
A velvety-smooth approach
I’ve delighted in many times.

“I think I’m going to have a second cup of coffee,
and stay in my pajamas a while longer.
I hope you’re okay with this?”

“I think you would be foolish not to,” I say.
“The best thing about knowing you’ll have a second cup
is it makes the first cup that much more amazing,
because you know you’re going to do it again.”

She smiles in her lovely way,
thankful for the factual silliness,
acknowledging the wisdom shared.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Again my muse inspires.

Review Request Direction: How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: San Francisco Bay Area - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Bukowski

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The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Second Cup" is a charming and whimsical piece that explores the simple pleasures of life. The speaker describes a moment with their companion, as they stand in the doorway having a conversation about having a second cup of coffee. The language is simple and easy to follow, allowing the reader to easily picture the scene in their mind.

One of the strengths of this poem is the way it captures the small moments of daily life and elevates them to something special. The speaker's enthusiasm for the idea of having a second cup of coffee is infectious, and it's easy to imagine how this simple act could bring joy and comfort to someone's day.

Another strength of the poem is the gentle humor that runs throughout. The speaker's response to their companion's decision to have a second cup of coffee is both playful and wise. The line "The best thing about knowing you'll have a second cup / is it makes the first cup that much more amazing" is particularly effective, as it captures the anticipation and satisfaction that can come from a simple routine.

One possible line edit for this poem could be to replace "factual silliness" with something that more accurately conveys the wisdom and humor of the speaker's response. Perhaps "practical wit" or "amusing insight" would be more fitting.

Overall, "Second Cup" is a delightful poem that celebrates the small pleasures of life and the joy that can come from sharing those moments with someone you care about.

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Geezer

got something more from this, that anyone who "runs" regularly, would see, and that is that she is dressed and in the doorway
getting ready [by twisting, turning, stretching] to go for a morning run, while her companion asks if she minds if he stays home to enjoy that second cup of coffee and be lazy. Nicely done. ~ Geezer.
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Lavender

Hello, Michael,
A sweet moment captured. I sincerely hope you share your lovely poetry with your wife, not just because it is so tender, but because it is "you" - the two of you. Almost like a daily journal of your companionship. AI and I will need to agree to disagree - my favorite line is "...thankful for the factual silliness..." which is expressed not by words, but by her lovely smile. Magic!
L