Old Friends

The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

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This poem, titled "Old Friends," explores the speaker's introspection on their heart and the love it holds. The language is simple, but some of the phrasing feels awkward and could benefit from some editing. For example, "One who's slow to beat" feels clunky and could be improved by changing it to "One that beats slowly." Additionally, the repetition of "I have a heart" feels a bit repetitive and could be rephrased to avoid redundancy.

However, the sentiment behind the poem is sweet, and the idea of a heart and soul emanating warmth is a lovely image. The line "Only moving away when the words are taken with trust" is a powerful reminder that trust is essential in any relationship, and the last line is a beautiful declaration of the speaker's capacity for love.

Overall, while the poem could benefit from some editing to improve the flow and avoid repetition, the sentiment behind it is touching and relatable.

Suggested line edit: "One that beats slowly" instead of "One who's slow to beat."

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made for holding love and redistributing it! I think yours is doing great!
I'm not sure of what your intent was in the line of: "To flinch at the touch"
But I think it was meant to describe the feeling that it can be easily hurt.
Yes, our hearts can be hurt with just a touch, but just as easily soothed with a kind word
or a gentle gesture. If I may...?

I have a heart
One that beats slowly
It doesn't quite match the standard tune

But a heart nonetheless
And a soul to fill
They are slow to warm and flinch
At the touch of this cold world

There is enough love within
This heart and soul
To place a hand and
Feel a pulse, only moving away
When the words are taken with trust
To know it's understood
That I have a heart
And it is enough
Loving all who have touched it

As always, any advice I give is meant to be used, twisted or abused
Use whatever you like, making it your own. ~ Geezer.
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