The Artist

This poem is an ode to the power of art and beauty, and it is evident that the speaker is deeply moved by the subject of their art. The way in which the speaker describes the subject's features is both vivid and emotive, and it is clear that their words have been chosen with care.

One suggested line edit would be to remove the repetition of "I see your face, I know your face so well" throughout the poem. While this repetition can add emphasis to the subject's presence and importance, it can also become somewhat distracting after a while.

Another suggested line edit would be to consider a stronger conclusion, one that ties everything together and leaves the reader with a lasting impression. While the final line is melancholic and evocative, it could benefit from a sense of resolution or closure.

Overall, this poem is a beautiful tribute to the transformative power of art and the enduring allure of beauty.n\n\ The above is an computer generated response. Please send feedback through https://www.neopoet.com/contact

your first line would open a sonnet very effectively. I won't go into critique because I think you should pursue stepping up your game on this one considering the flowery language you are using.

Thomas

with our newfound friend, I am going to call him 'Artie'. Artie makes a couple of good points; that the words are chosen with care, but also choices that are limited by what they want to say. The face seems all important.
Eyes and lips are the most expressive and get the most attention.
I too, would edit out those lines from all but one part.
The third stanza, the first time it appears.
Delete the rest of them. An edit of the last lines should take up the slack
of the missing lines before, by saying

"You are there
I am here
We shall never meet, I fear"

This keeps the rhyme, and the idea that
the writer does have hope to meet... maybe, someday.

I don't know if I helped at all, but welcome to any of the ideas.
Use them, abuse them, twist them to your use. ~ Geezer.
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I like this except one thing. Repeating a line or stanza rapidly loses its impact if done too many times within a poem of this length. I would recommend keep it in the last stanza and third stanza but perhaps omitting the repetition in other places. Just a thought

I enjoyed this and the way you wove the images into the poem, like an artist.

These two lines made me stop and recap, Your lips of scarlet, Smiling as a Spartan harlot. Good structure and rhyming scheme and made me sit up and take more notice.

I'd like to read it again when you've worked on it, please let me know, :) x

Great, I'll take a look, thank you.

The poem for me is all about love and longing. Your imagery is excellent and the changes you've made have worked out well :)

the opening stanza, and upon reading it never had chance to finish, I would still be content. What a beautifully powerful opening that was! And inspiring - the sort of thing one poet reads from another, and thinks "Yes, that is what it's like! Now I want to write a poem too-"