Candlewitch
Candlewitch
Mar 20, 2023

"I am" (by: eddy styx)

A
FAT
round
lazy
brown.spider.sitting
sitting
SITTING
indolently on my web
patiently
weaving
A
sticky thread
of
Cotton~Candy~Words

About This Poem

Last Few Words: this poem was written by my Male alter ego who writes on the darker side of life.

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Northwestern Wisconsin USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe

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Comments

Rosewood Apothecary

Astounding imagery. Makes me think of Anansi stories. But knowing your style I’m thinking this is quite terrifyingly murderous in intention.

Great timing,
Tim

Jackweb

Apt, yet, packed with great imagery. Indeed, poets are silent weavers in time of creativity.

Nice one!
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RoseBlack

Made me think of Kipling's "Just So Stories." I can see the brown spider just patiently weaving his/her web. Great imagery and use of language.