Parents conceive young ones out of love
They educate them with great care
They protect them without thought
They punish them at times
They cry when they fail
They smile with them
They bless them
They pray
Love
Feb 27, 2023
This poem is part of the contest:
Neopoem Of The Week February 26th to March 4th 2023
Parents
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Thank you trying different
Thank you trying different formats
Parents
Hello, Clentin,
This is a perfect nonet in every way. It is quite beautiful. I especially enjoy the way the 7 inner lines all have a similar appearance and the first and last lines are different from the others and hold the word "love" giving the sense of boundaries, protection - perhaps a hug.
Thank you for this,
L
Thank you for your comments
Thank uou for your comment, i ppreciate tem very much
I wonder if the title should be love and the last line be Parents?
Parents
Hi, Clentin,
The last line is a strong word for the feeling in your poem, and just as necessary, it has the correct syllable count. :)
L
Nice parenting it's ok
But none of your poets have said ..
there are too many
they
revise you may
and
why all first letters as Caps
it thus seems to be a statement
more than a poem
Apply your mind if you may
why dismay...