Michael Anthony
Michael Anthony
Feb 17, 2023

Coffee Shop

Cold, I pull my coat to me,
near the place where we started
A shelter for my thoughts
I pass almost daily

Your cure for a hardness of the heart,
still the compass of my affection,
became lyrics I couldn’t improve upon

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: San Francisco Bay Area - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Bukowski

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Comments

Geezer

you still think of the coffee shop as the place where you had your heart melted. Well done, minimal words and so much said.
Your title is good, the theme is great, the theme is universal and I love the way you shot straight to the end with your story.
Nice job, ~ Geezer.
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Rosewood Apothecary

You’re saying an awful lot.
The first line is more than it seems. It is cold when we maybe don’t have that “compass for affection”. It’s very warm when we do get to a place like that.

Then of course the literal meaning of the poem on the surface is just gorgeous

Tim