Lavender
Lavender
Feb 21, 2023

Gray

Fields before me slumber,
dreaming of by-gone days.
They fade, then hide within
the gray of a fog rolling in.

Soft ground gives beneath
my boots as I carry along.
Earth and sky surround me
in a memory of yesterday.

I feel the dew drip from the trees,
like second-hand rain.
A fence wanders over lonely hills -
my weary old friend.

My pale thoughts scatter,
like seeds sown in early days
of a now forgotten spring.

Where once I walked in manna,
now fallow ground whispers.
I listen carefully as the
fog grows grayer still.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: I tend to read Ted Kooser

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Comments

Seren

Seren

2 years 2 months ago

Gorgeous, nothing to suggest just respect for an amazing poem!! Beautiful! I tried to pick favourite lines but I can't. They're all wonderful!

Love J x

Lavender

Sometimes the mood of the surrounding scenery just slips into a poem. Thank you so much for reading, and ambling in the fields with me.
Lxx

Geezer

of many a late Fall or early Spring Day, early in the morning. My favorite lines?
"A fence wanders over lonely hills
my weary old friend" ~ Geezer.
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Lavender

It seems as I get older, I look forward to spending more time looking and listening to what's around me. Sometimes there are some pretty sweet connections.
Thank you, as always!
L

Rosewood Apothecary

My pale thoughts scatter,
like seeds sown in early days
of a now forgotten spring.

Does not get better than that…oh wait

Where once I walked in manna,
now fallow ground whispers.
I listen carefully as the
fog grows grayer still.

Yes it does!
Tim

Indivisible_Origin

It creates quickly a change of scenery for the reader. Veery immersive. Nicely worded generally. I particularly liked "Earth and sky surround me / in a memory of yesterday."

IO

Lavender

I just listen, and there is always something to write. Thank you for your generous comments!
L

RoseBlack

made me think of someone wandering through nature, taking it all in during the early morning fog. Someone who was alone with their thoughts and reflecting. Such a beautiful, delicate piece. Well done!

Lavender

That is pretty much how it was / is. There is a nearby field with a few old trees around its boundary. The area has become a welcoming familiar spot.
Thanks, again!
L