Candlewitch
Candlewitch
Feb 19, 2023
This poem is part of the contest:

Tomorrow Is Another Day

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Tomorrow Is Another Day (contest)

I see 'forever' in your eyes
we have come so far, together.
I never thought I could feel this way,
until there was you, coloring my skies.

you never loved before you met me
you thought romance to be sober and polite
in your wildest dreams you never thought
it could be a wild expedition in fantasy

sonorous, I woke you from staid sleep
imagine your surprise, being pursued.
I knocked you off your feet
no woman had ever before made you weep

worlds of discovery in your seeking hands
soul bared under your considering glance
taking us places we had never been
from deserts of glaring sun and shifting sands

you did not have to ask me twice to stay
I saw it in your eyes, those intense burning orbs
I see our future solidified, hand in hand together,
you are all of my tomorrows and tomorrow is another day.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Northwestern Wisconsin USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe

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Comments

Seren

Seren

2 years 2 months ago

I am only going to say

Sigh. ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh.

Perfection in words and love, that end line is a cracker.

Love always your Lilbit

Candlewitch

he is up but he has not yet read it....he is making breakfast, lol! I'm so glad you liked it. I never tire of writing about "us" or him.

*love, your Cat

RoseBlack

The site is so full of love and admiration of each other's significant others! It is absolutely wonderful to see. Your relationship with your Steven is so great! I am so glad you have happiness!

Rula

Rula

2 years 1 month ago

All I can say that you're both blessed. Hope this happiness to last forever.
Thank you for sharing this lovely
Best wishes dear on the contest.