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Feb 16, 2023

Woman Man Lord then God (Edit Seren My Maestro)

One must be born first
to a woman called a mom

then become a man (or woman)
after performing unparalleled deeds
become a Lord

later when gone with the
chilling winds
into darkest forests
researched
goes into oblivion

all who remain behind
brand the one as
God

you could be one
such a one
nonequivalent
so many have been
in mind's memory
still are immortally living

name them will ye
you know em all
who are now
since aeons

Living Eternal Gods
.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: UNIVERSE...ETERNITY C/O ME, ROU

Favorite Poets: All across the Internet whom I read

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Comments

Poets Hand

What an impressive thought. This reminds me of ancient Greek or Roman mythology and how men were made into gods in those days. What is it to be mortal and what do we build that is immortal?

This is a great thought provoking poem.
Thank you for sharing it with me.

Poets Hand
Hannah

Leslie

BEAUTIFUL AND DELICATE. I WISH THAT EVERYONE KNEW WHO AND WHAT THEY WERE AND SPOKE ONE
WITH ANOTHER WITH THE SAME CONSIDERATE SOFTNESS. BLESS YOU FOR YOUR WISDOM!

Leslie

SUCH A FRESH IDEA, I WISH EVERYONE KNEW WHO THEY REALLY WERE AND COMMUNICATED WITH THAT SAME RESPECT. I LOVED IT, SIMPLE YET JUST AS TRUE AS THE DAY AN INFANT COMES TO US. FRAGILE, YES DELICATE IN ITS BEAUTY. GREAT JOB AND THANK YOU FOR SHARING YOUR GIFT OF WISDOM.

Seren

Seren

2 years 2 months ago

I am a mere serf among gods,

I have suggestions the capitalised words should be written in lower case, it's like you're randomly yelling. That's just my opinion. But I think your poem would have more impact if you didn't yell
LORD, LIVING ETERNAL G O D S

Why did you put spaces between the letters of the word GODS G O D S

I think it's a deep poem and I am so pleased and thank the weird elf God that you're really making an effort.

The Weird Elf would be so proud of your growth

Love and hugs Sis xox