Jackweb
Jackweb
Feb 09, 2023

THE UNFORTUNATE TIME

The fire of time
is burning us
we're now groaning in pain.

Our democracy has woefully failed us!
now a stinge to humanity
What a shame?

New naira notes policy
has broaden
a cloud of darkness!

The anguish of grief,
hunger and a surge of
anxiety has melted us.

Our hopes are lost
in the sands of time.
Where do we go from here?

You've been answering
a giant of Africa but, you've
lost your vigour and integrity.

What ails you to be eroding
at this time your citizenry
needs you?

Your banking system
has nothing to write
home about.

For estimation of
immeasurable queues
lengths and unknown.

We're highly disappointed
in this cashless society
you have Inaugurated.

CBN's new notes swap have
transpired an insurrection
that could bring a ceaseless

uproar, civil disobedience
that could rip the nation into
havoc and untold hardship.

©® Onyinyechi Cosmos Etu

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Imo State - Republic of Biafra(Nigeria), NGA

Favorite Poets: Late Christopher Okigbo

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Comments

Candlewitch

in this sentence: needs you a lot? remove: (a lot) for a smoother finish to the line. that is the only suggestion that I have.
your poem is a heartfelt plea that stirs the soul!

*hugs, Cat

Jackweb

you've a bird's -eyes view on the theme of this poem. Thank you so much for reading and commenting. You really nailed it.
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M4GG0TM3NT4L

i just really like the rhythm of this!! very pretty :)

Seren

Seren

2 years 2 months ago

I am so sorry that your country is in chaos.

I think this does have really good rhythm when it's read a couple of times I got right into it

Well Done!!!

kind regards Seren