Deep

Lone ears hear no love
The heart weeps in sad refrains
Splinters in burned ash

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe

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Comments

I'm feeling...

this one! I thought I heard what you were saying the other night. Sorry if it's so. ~ Geez.
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Thanks Gee

Valentine's Day is always a little downer for me and this year was no exception. Figured I would put it to a poem.

Should we play around?

Yes it’s true that deaf ears hear no tales. Check this-

Lone ears hear not love
The heart weeps in strained refrains
Splinters in burned ash

Hi Tim

I like this a lot. Especially the first line.

dear Carrie,

I am so sorry for your situation, but it is true; a broken heart is fantastic inspiration to write with, as you have proven here,

*hugs, Cat

Thank you Cat

It's ok though...I have written many good pieces as a result.

Thank you Kat

Hope you had a wonderful Valentine's Day

Deep

Hello, Carrie,
Concise description of pain, which I hope will soon move along and your love for writing will bring about words of positive love.
Take care,
L

Hi L

I am slowly working on it. One foot in front of the other...thank you for the comment