haiku

winter bears his age
thin, spent hands longing for warmth
bright seedlings of spring

About This Poem

Last Few Words: With only another month or so to go, Old Man Winter must be feeling a bit weary.

Style/Type: Structured: Eastern

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: I tend to read Ted Kooser

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Comments

Thoughts of Spring

Old man winter must be ready for a nap! I love the image of his old, thin, frail hands getting ready to retire for the season. Well done! I love haiku.

Hi, Carrie,

Yes! I agree! He's probably needing a nap very soon!
Thank you so much for reading!
L

Well done

Nice personification of the old cold boney fingers.

Tim

Hello, Tim,

I'm actually going to shuffle this around a bit, not feeling completely satisfied with it. Thank you for reading! Hope you had a fantastic Valentine's Day.
L

Hello, Kat,

Thank you for visiting and reading! I appreciate your insights.
L

Loved the poem. I viewed

Loved the poem. I viewed several haiku poems so I could try to write a few. Thank you for such a good example

I appreciate your comments very much. I am actually still not satisfied with this, as the second line needs some work. I'd like it to be the pause, the "cutting away" line that renders the contrast of the haiku. I look forward to reading yours!
Thanks, again!
L