The abrupt decapitalization
have set hovering dark clouds
Cash flow seems mysterious
but, in reality is just a
case of mathematics
The chief policy makers
have awakened a swarm of bees
thronging on every financial institutions
We're now stranded birds
©® Onyinyechi Cosmos Etu
Last Few Words: As the scarcity of new naira notes stifle economic activities, the Central Bank of Nigeria has attributed the continued scarcity of new naira notes to hoarding in certain quarters of the country.
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Dear JackWeb
This is really good but I have a two or three suggestions, whichever way you look at it
have set a hovering dark clouds
Either remove the *a* or the *s* on clouds.
have awaken(ed) a swarm of bees
Other than those suggestions I think this is a really solid write
Well done!
Kind regards Jayne
Thanks ...
a lot dear Seren for the eagle eye. Edits done!!!
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Well done that reads much
Well done that reads much smoother now.
Glad I could help!
Kind regards Jayne
O yeah
You're are the best
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Citizens are making a run on the banks?
Jeez this sounds volatile. I hope you’re safe?
Tim
Our monies...
are no longer safe! I couldn't get a dime in my own bank today after spending 5 hours. All efforts was a futile attempt. Bank officials telling us NO MONEY IN THE BANK. Very frustrating!
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That’s disheartening
I wish you good luck. I hope they rectify the situation posthaste. What an injustice. I’m so very sorry.
Tim
Not at all!
It's a strong- standing issue. Worsening day by day. Both the rich and poor are bearing the brunt. The funny part of it, we had to buy our local currency. Very terrible situation.
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Our country...
is already a mess! Everything turned upside down. Poor masses are the victims. The old notes ceased to be legal tender since 10 of this month yet the availability of the new notes are not to be found in any of these banks. People are dying here.
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