Swan
To lift on high
my carriage of head,
white coat of down
sometimes shed.
Can you know me
this time, this dawn,
know that I’m,
a well swam Swan.
Feb 24, 2011
Swan
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I see i write i await...
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
One crit...
Swum instead of swam. ~ Geezer
Where i,
Where i come from in Scotland we never swum anywhere, we always swam it was much more fun. Thanks for your comments and time. Regards Roscoe...
To some,
To some they still are on the menu, but slightly above our standing, or so they like to believe. Regards Roscoe...
hahaha B
hahaha B
a well-swum swan? surely you can think of a better end, Roscoe!
~A
Thank you,
Thank you, it was meant as a fun poem. Now you 've got me seriously thinking about changing it. Love Roscoe..
Aw Shirley,
Aw Shirley you as well, I will definitly wok on this again. Love Roscoe..
hi Roscoe
I liked this for the fun of reading. If you feel lead to change it too much, consider leaving it as is and writing another on same subject..................scribbler
Thank you,
Thank you, i am really undecided but will think hard on it. Regards Roscoe...
Sounds good,
Sounds good, thank you for your input. I will give it a day or so to rattle through my head, but so far that sounds best. Love Roscoe...
Thank you,
Thank you, i am thinking hard about this one, and have a few ideas. Love Roscoe..