RoseBlack
RoseBlack
Feb 11, 2023

New Beginning

Ashen clouds spread
Like doom's quilt against a sullen sky
Give way to cumulo cotton balls
radiant, in utopian sunshine

Fairies flit from tree to tree
Drinking Earth's gifts from the vine
Mindful meditation beneath bright rays
gauzy fog has lifted, blessed be!

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe

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Lavender

Hi, Carrie,
The clouds part, and the sun bursts through - a poem filled with hope and optimism. It feels like a celebration! I really enjoyed this!
Thank you,
L

Geezer

the sun shone through! I'm hoping this is the beginning of a new beginning! best of luck, ~ Geez.
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Poets Hand

I just love the first stanza and the simile "Like dooms quilt against a sullen sky" giving way to "cumulo cotton balls"
and the picture of an 'Utopian Sun' such strong imagery. Utopia being the perfect state pushing aside dooms quilt. Just perfect poetry. I love it.

Well done.
Poets Hand
Hannah

Seren

Seren

2 years 2 months ago

I this this is gorgeous.

New beginnings is a step into the ethereal. Beautifully done.

Love & hugs Jayne xox

Candlewitch

your imagery filled my mind with the pictures described. the message comes across firmly and stays with the heart and soul. I love this foray into a bright new beginning!
* love, Cat
don't forget to keep your balance by writing/venting your dark side, too.
*ever, eddy