vandiemenspeak
vandiemenspeak
Feb 06, 2023

Night Tide (dream)

I think upon the water
Dreamt of in the night
It's preposterous, perfect
Ripples, linear and criss-crossing
Just so perfect
Just so right.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: A fragment...we'll see.

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Tasmania,Australia,Earth,Solar Systems,Milky way,Pint of Guniess, AUS

Favorite Poets: Glen Richards

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Comments

Geezer

I see a darkened pool of water in an isolation chamber, with ripples and crisscross lines, the movement of it born of
inhalation and exhalation. I don't know why, I just do. A piece to make one think. If that is what it is for, it does the job. ~ Geezer.
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Seren

Seren

2 years 2 months ago

The same poem can give the reader differing images. For me it was a lake. Rippling and moving moved with a gentle breeze, kissed in starlight.

I think this is a gorgeous short poem.

Cheers Seren

RoseBlack

I see a night sky, water rippling underneath. The moonlight is beating down as one floats along, pondering life's wonders. Well done!