Seren
Seren
Jan 27, 2023

Breathing Wildfires

the velvet knife
of your tongue
cut my skin

into a thousand
streamers of want
I feathered against
the unknown

a breath in the grasp
of insanity

I pooled
as ribbons on
the ground,
I was tossed to roll
aimless to reality

fire licked breasts
as thighs brushed static
into the palms of your
hands …

at first touch
is the flashback,

I burn up, a white flame

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Not sure about this one.

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda

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Comments

Candlewitch

such beautiful language usage...it feels diaphanous in the mind. and makes me feel the need to cry until I am dry, like "control" is no longer necessary... I bet you also know what "feather touching" is like, at your fingertips rooted in your belly! I loved the title, too!

*love, Sis

Seren

That's exactly what I was going for. The light feather touching that turns into a wildfire.

So glad you liked it I wasn't quite sure about this one. But then I never am about most of my poems.

Love Always Sis xoxox

Lavender

Hello, Jayne,
"I pooled as ribbons on the ground." Such feeling in those words - a willing melting of the heart.
Thank you!
L

Seren

It's not easy to motion into words but that's exactly what I try to do, and I am so glad you liked those lines.

thanks again for the read its always appreciated!

Hugs Jayne

Geezer

I feel the heat here. Nice job of steaming up the windshield! ~ Geez.
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P.S. Inspiration from this one!
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Seren

lol I think i may have already read what this inspired, wink wink, i think the greatest gift we can give each other as poets writers whatever we are, is the gift of inspiration.

so happy that you liked it

love and higgliest bugs Sis xox

S

after a cold shower lol. You might try ribbons instead of streams. For some reason it just seems better fit to me

Seren

I have already used the word ribbons in this one and i was trying not to be repetitive, I will give that some thought and see what else i maybe able to come up with, hope it was a nice HOT shower lol!!!

love and hugs Sis

Seren

hahaha I am happy you liked it, I will be round reading some poetry tonight or today sometime its 2.33am here ATM, I will see if I get tired or not. It's been a huge week.

hugs Jayne

lovedly

I know the very touch of fingers ...sliding down a spine ....
women --simply crash like butterflies in a golden mine ...
once entwined .....

Gorgeous words selection
Sis