Dreamwarrior
Feb 02, 2023

Bench Buddies

Disruptive thoughts of life intruded upon the peaceful scenery of the Sunday park
as a slow-moving sad faced old gentlemen
frozen by the years of solitude 
made small talk
with the chattering afternoon bird crowd.

Reclining in a death pose upon the bench
he frowned at the sky 
as the sun forced him out of his pretended grave shell
and the passing breeze gently prodded him
with thoughts of decay. 

"I was free once,” the wind whispered
“before the soft feather down of clouds framed my presence with sea swirls and land rot.
Now I am told where to blow. 

Gone are the days when I skimmed over the ocean in limitless contemplation of all life. 

The East?
The East always demanded more of me than I was willing to give.

The West?
The West loved me for the legends I blew through their land.

The North?
Yes, The North owns my heart, and always will.

The South?
The South never wanted me. Though they were always glad whenever I showed up. 

That is my tale. So move over my old friend.
Let me rest my weary bones beside you.
Share in your pain. 

Until the dark mistress arrives
To cover our presence
With the black light Of obscurity."

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Does it come alive for you?

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Country/Region: New Jersey

Favorite Poets: I'm really not into contemporary poetry too much. I only prefer reading the old masters. Keats

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Comments

Rosewood Apothecary

I get the title. I’m not sure it’s right though. The poem itself is beautiful.

Tim

D

Thanks so much for your great comments my friend. Bench Buddies just describes the relationship between the old man in the park and the wind, who is more or less the only thing keeping him company. As the wind blows by, it sits and talks with him.

I mean, I think it fits better than anything else I could place there. But if you can come up with something else, I'd be willing to change it of course.

Thanks again for yer remarks, my friend.

Always a pleasure hearing from you.

Take care.

D

Thank you very much, Bilbo. I loved hearing yer comments about my little personification here.

They're very appreciated.

Take care.

Geezer

echo all the comments above. Very well done, the title is just a little tiny flippant for the story, but I can't think of another that will suffice. ~ Geezer.
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D

Well, thanks so much for yer very enjoyable comments my friend. I really dug what you had to say. And yes, the title may seem just a bit commonplace for such a poem. But it's only cause I wanted the poem to totally speak for itself without the title detracting from it.

But, I may still try and come up with another title that describes the poem in a more powerful way.

Thanks again for yer input, Geeze.

Great hearing from you.

Be well.